Chapter 20 | FunDza

Can I be honest and say I was not feeling the story, maybe there could be a part 2, it can be about Ntobeko hurting Siza or something, I would love to hear your thoughts, if you are cool with leaving some ideas I will credit you at the begin of the story, but that is if I had picked your idea and mashed it with my own…

Oh and it has come to my attention that there are people who take my stories here and go post them somewhere else, please don’t. I know it might look cute to you but please don’t, this is my copyright and I don’t condone or allow anyone to repost my stuff, I’m begging you to not do that, even if you might ask I will still say no, let’s respect each other guys… I guess that is why I wasn’t even feeling this story. I don’t want to lose the love of writing because of people who will steal my stuff and go post it somewhere else, I don’t put copyright rights at the end of my stories just for the sake of it guys, it is to stop whoever thinks it is okay to just steal someone else’s stuff

Now that is out of the way, thank you guys for reading, I really hope that you enjoyed, the next story will be A daughter of a kidnapper, I don’t know when I’ll actually write it because right now I have no will to write anything or maybe this may just be my last story here but we’ll…🎈

If or when I decide to carry on which novel must I start with, should it be A daughter of a kidnapper or I fell in love with a convict 2?

I had to edit a lot of things out, if you are keen on reading some of the parts I took out, search I fell in love with an abductor on Facebook❤️

xoxo

Mbali Nyabane

35 Responses

Thanks Author you managed to play with my feelings 😄😄 so nice of you 😚

Mpho Ngovene · 3 days ago

Hey..Mbali I think part 2 should be Ntobeko getting pregnant and another woman starts seducing Siza and eventually gives in. Then Siza regrets his decisions and goes to apologize to Ntobeko

Kekana Marriam · 4 months ago

@Olwakhe Tembe,😂😭

Melokuhle Nhleko · 5 months ago

This story was a tough one to read. Stirred so many emotions in me. Part of me wanted justice for the girls and for him and his associates to get punished (jail) for their cruelty. Nonetheless, it was a good one. I'm glad I read it. I learned and it opened my eyes. Brilliant! The writer is good👏

Lerato Letswalo · 6 months ago

Superb work 🥰 part 2 plz

Lilly Mbuli · 6 months ago

To think I was about to drop a minnie series about a sad love story this month. I think, I'll pause for now. This is demotivating.

The real Charlotte · 6 months ago

Mara why abantu banje he! This is bs* Only cheap people will do this. How original, you pathetic losers! I love writting when I have time and love reading too. Now that i have found a favour author on this page you go do this. Why do you like ruining beautiful things. This is someone else talent your destroying. YOU NEED TO STOP WHAT YOU'RE DOING! Sue them love, sue I'd you can or take legal action of some sort! This IP! Mbalz, love. I would give the idea, but since you have mentioned this. I won't proceed as this is upsetting. Please take us your real fans with you, where you'll be publishing your "protected" hard work. I enjoy your books so much that I don't mind 're reading them x10 times 😊 I appreciate and love your work. As I lover of romance and love fanatic, I'm being well served everytime time :) 💝The Real Charlotte

Dear Mbali Firstly you are way 2 talented 2 let other's put u down dnt give into their will of stealing ur work to break u that's what they want... Secondly im speaking from experience i always loved writing but let family pressure change my mind im a qualified educator n a mom of 3 today but u emoted hence writing 4 me now seems a distant memory... Thirdly i would love for u 2 continue writing a part 2... Probably about Siza popping the question of marriage n maybe a twist from Nthando to the couple.. Hope it helps.. God bless All te best favourite author...

kha…@gmai... · 9 months ago

Your story was outstanding and I can't wait for part 2 and the other stories that await. I wish I could help you out with a few ideas, but my mind is blank. I'm struggling to concentrate with my own brainstorming, but let's see how it goes 😭❤️🔥Oh and don't let people be the reason for your passion for writing stop, your too talented to let them stop you❤️❤️❤️💕💕💕🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥

Micayla Swartz · 10 months ago

Now that I think about it, Thandiwe also had her own love and found her Happily ever after with Bongani in Dusk 1 v 3, it is safe to say that my characters have their own kind of love and have their own character development

Mbali Nyabane · 11 months ago

Kgopotso Mohlala The only person who never got a happily ever after is Thandiwe from Dusk, I still need to revisit her journey but overall she is the only one with no happy ending, thing is I'm not just writing fantasy there needs to be some reality here and there. How many are there who don't have their happily ever after out of the 7 billion people? Probably there are 0.5% people who have true love Sometimes it's okay, when one doesn't get their happily ever after and there are many books with too many happily ever after, I have yet to read a book with no happily ever after, just pure sorrow or just being content with themselves... With all that said, there will be a happily ever after only because I don't want to drag this story🙈❤️

I really enjoyed the story thank you somuch as much as a enjoyed it , I was looking out for part 2 please continue writing this one I want to know the conclusion even though I don't want Thobeka hurting Siza nor Siza hurting Thobeka because I love them as they are, they are lovable and a power couple of course.

Bulelo Mdlalose · 11 months ago

Wow nice story mbalz,so as for clues i would recommend maybe dis time u do try a happily ever after because i've noticed that most your books don't fall in that category i for one i'ma sucker for romance and i believe you are too judging by your books so why don't you just trust yourself on this one and do try a happily ever after.anyways love your work keep it going ❤️♥️

Kgopotso Mohlala · 11 months ago

Siza and Ntobeko should get married and have a child and live happily until their bond get tested when Ntando and some other girl who worked for Siza in the past worked together to separate them because Ntando realized that he is inlove with Ntobeko and that girl is inlove with Siza but at the end Siza and Ntobeko should not separate but instead their love grew stronger than ever.This is what I think part 2 should be about.

Sam…@gmai... · 11 months ago

@Mbali I agree with @thandeka mphambani But for this one thanks we enjoyed shame I don't want to lie 🫶🫶🫶💫🫶🫶💫🫶💫🫶💫🫵🫵❤️‍🩹🫀🥹 And as for those who stole your story may God bless them shame coz what they are doing is wrong 😭😭😭

Scelinhlanhla Mpana · 11 months ago

U dd it again Mbali bbes...thank u for da great story kip up da good work n plz dnt stop just becos some jealous individual decide to repost yo work, n GUYS pls aniyekeni ukweba umsebenzi kaMbali ayy. Nifuna ukudla amandla enyingane ngalomkhuba wenu omubi sengaze asho kangaki kanti. ... abwt part 2 I trust u Mbali u r very talented n anything cn happen kule smart n ever working brain of yoz😍❤.....🥰🤩🤩🤩🤩 big up nkosazane yosiba👊❤

Thuli Dweku · 11 months ago

Mbail it can be anything but ntobeko hurting siza of siza hurting ntobeko no plz don't their love is to cute to be ruined

Les…@gmai... · 11 months ago

@Yandiswa Daniso It will be too much like I'm in love with my kidnapper, and it will steer away from the abductor part, because the point of being abducted in this story was to put the girls in work, I don't see how the baby will be put to work or to be used, there has to be a why before I write so I am not sure why the baby will be abducted and for what reason, it will be understandable if maybe Siza had a child and Ntobeko had a brother or a boyfriend prior to being abducted and they abducted the baby... In this part I don't see Ntobeko pregnant but the story sometimes leads you, we'll see how it pans out @Olwakhe Tembe I don't know how to wrote about LGBTQI to be honest, I don't see myself venturing into that part not because I have a problem with them because I won't be able to put myself in their shoes, in each story that I write I become the character, I must feel every emotion that they feel before I can write and I'm not really sure I can put myself in the shoes of someone who is part of LGBTQI, thanks for the idea but this one will have to pass me @nhlekomelokuhle0@gmai I want drama and I am not sure how Ntobeko's mother passing will add to the drama and I'm enough with people passing first it was Ndumiso, then Sindie's kid and after it was Zandile @Thandeka Mphambani Ahh mara that will be like I'm in love with my kidnapper, where Melusi met Zandile, I am not looking for something that is similar to my previous story, I need something fresh, I'll think of something thanks for the idea and pointers, you guys have made me think of how I'm going to start I see many of you want them to get married, they have been dating for less than 2 months and you guys are speaking of marriage🤣🤣 I know life in the books passes very fast but it is a bit too early for marriage, they must suffer first before getting their happily ever after, is that me hinting at a part 3 before I even write part 2? Shocking🤣🤦🏽‍♀️

U can do a part 2 where siza and ntobeko have a child and child gets kidnapped just like his mother ntobeko to see how will siza feel but the child must be saved by his father not fall in love with the kidnapper and to see how it will test siza relationship with ntobeko♥️♥️♥️♥️♥️love ur work

Yandiswa Daniso · 11 months ago

It hurts seeing your hard work being used by someone else who didn't even work hard for it but don't stop writing you are a good author Mbalz I love all your work Mbali Nyabane♥️💯🥺

Flöplëß kïddïë. · 11 months ago

Yazi when I read the title of this book I thought ukuluma nge adapta (lheyanto yoku charga 👻👻👻🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣😂🤣😂🤣😂😂😁😁😁😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅😅)

Olwakhe Tembe · 11 months ago

The convict one pls n dankie👻👻👻👻👻🖤💗💖💝🖤💜🖤💜

Maybe p2 could be a combination of ur stories (one of them maybe daughter of a kidnapper )where Siza n Ntobeko have a child then learn that their child is part of the LGBTQ+ community 🤷🤷🤷🤷🤷🤷👻😻👻😻👻😻👻👻👻👻👻👻👻 otherwise luved ur work nice one mogal 💝💝💝💗💖💝💖💖💜🖤💜🖤am u making any sense 🤨🤔🤨🤔

I would really be happy if part 2 is about siza and ntobekas love blossoming and them building a family together

Rejoice Mabunda · 11 months ago

Mamelo Maja To be honest no story is ever complete, it can be twisted in anyway and direction and I'm not a fan of a happily ever after, not that they won't get it, they will get it but after they have faced some hurdles along the way. I mean look at Sindie and Shawn and Melusi and Melokuhle for example, they have faced their own fair share of troubles, I already know how I will start the first chapter... Part 2 is definitely coming but after a daughter of a kidnapper has been released

I feel sorry for you but plz don't stop writing, you're original and realistic, I love your stories very much, most of us do, I think I'd love to hear more about daughter of a kidnapper cuz I feel like this lovestory is complete

Mamelo Maja · 11 months ago

𝙲𝙰𝙽 𝙿𝙰𝚁𝚃 2 𝙱𝙴 𝚆𝙷𝙴𝙽 𝚂𝙸𝚉𝙰 𝙰𝙽𝙳 𝙽𝚃𝙾𝙱𝙴𝙺𝙾 𝙶𝙴𝚃 𝙼𝙰𝚁𝚁𝙸𝙴𝙳 𝙰𝙽𝙳 𝙷𝙰𝚅𝙴 𝙲𝙷𝙸𝙻𝙳𝚁𝙴𝙽 𝙰𝙽𝙳 𝚃𝙷𝙴𝙽 𝙻𝙸𝚅𝙴 𝙰 𝙷𝙰𝙿𝙿𝚈 𝙻𝙸𝙵𝙴 𝚄𝙽𝚃𝙸𝙻 𝙽𝚃𝙾𝙱𝙴𝙺𝙾'𝚂 𝙼𝙾𝙼 𝙳𝙸𝙴𝚂 𝙾𝙵 𝙰𝙽 𝙸𝙻𝙻𝙽𝙴𝚂𝚂 𝚃𝙷𝙰𝚃 𝚂𝙷𝙴 𝚆𝙰𝚂 𝙷𝙸𝙳𝙸𝙽𝙶 𝙿𝙻𝚉

nhl…@gmai... · 11 months ago

NYC story Mbali🥰💃but I keep asking myself will Siza eNtobeko gt married o will the people 4rm his past dat h used 2 work wit cumback 2hurt him 4 betraying them.O if Maka Ntobeko ethola iqiniso nendlela abahlangan ngayo noNtobeko usazoqhubeka amthande yin.Part 2 Mbali plz siyawucela🙏😊😊😊 Guyz aniyeken ukuPost izincwadi zaMbali umuntu akabhale naye aPoste ezakhe plz guyz hlezi esho nteyodwa njalo Mbali

Nelisiwe Ngema · 11 months ago

Your story was fantastic part 2 is definitely a must...I could read it again yaz nami I enjoyed every chapter big up...On part 2 you could spice things up as we know inlove there are uncertainties just a bit of twist and turns between them for example Ntosh could be preg for that guy who raped him I just wonder how will Siza feel about that ngapha he hasn't slept with her

nto…@gmai... · 11 months ago

Thank you @Thandeka Mphambani, I'll definitely see what I come up with, with the pointer/idea that you gave me

Wooow Mbalz u have done it again u're the best babes I have enjoyed every chapter of this book though my heart broken when the gals were taken against their will am glad they were released, I think you should start with part 2 of this book it's so exciting am certain Sizathu will treat Ntobe like the princess that she is he might be distracted along the way maybe when he revisit his old life going to a strip club with Ntando maybe he meets an old flame there or just a gal who's interested in him and he can't say no to her no matter what his conscious tells him something maan js to shake Ntobeko out of her comfort zone a little

Thandeka Mphambani · 11 months ago

not sure about it

Zee · 11 months ago

You are talented but a part 2 not sure about.💙