I met a girl in a shop
I went to her
I asked her name she told me
I asked her number she give me
We talked on Whatsapp
I told him how I feel about her
Everytime I tell her she post a picture with a man
Now I do not no what I must do
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@Kingsley Khobotlo.. asithembe kuthi u Siyamthanda uzoksebenzisa loko okdlulisayo ngoba sisafuna ukumbona eqhubeka nomsebenzi omuhle
Thetitle of this poem made me curious, and that's a good thing, but if I can make the following suggestions: 1. Finding a flow or rhythm in a poem is important (it gives it a heartbeat); 2. Use language that paints a picture and invokes imagery; 3. If English is not your first language, first write the poem in the language you are most comfortable in; 4. Read your poem to someone you trust before making a submission; 5. Write in 3D (the words used here are flat); 6. Take the reader on a journey or let them in on a secret; and 7. Emotions! Emotions and more emotions. Writing is a journey Siyamthanda, so don't give up.