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your story is ok...its just that you looked like you were in a hurry ...but anyways everyone makes mistakes💔💔💖💖💖...dont feel sad...your story is nice but next time pls author..
The story looks interesting if only u could work hard on ur writing skills ask for help from people who have done this before
I think Onni has a point of view in what she is saying so please don't give up. I do see a great potential in you my babes❤️❤️❤️
Lindokuhle Ngema plz do not get discouraged but rather continue writing plz.. I can already see you are passionate ❤️❤️❤️
I would like to read part 2 but darling your story was all over the place I got lost in the middle, so next time plz don' try to summarize anything just write the story as it is, it's fine if it's a bit long we just want to read something that makes sense. When we read we like to imagine what you are telling us and I have to say with this story it was very difficult creating images of the scenes because the story kinda lacked description. Plz try to describe everything again it doesn't not have to be too much description and we don't mind having to read for hours. So I advise u read the other stories written by good authors like Fiona, they do a great job with their writing, and I believe u can too